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    dots Submission Name: Sanitydots
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    Author: kitcat
    ASL Info:    19/f/Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/2/1
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 150
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    Description:
       This is a poem I wrote a few years ago when going through a rough period of time in my life. Please let me know what you think of it.


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    dotsSanitydots
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    You walk a thin line,
    occasionally falling into insanity.
    Too many things go 'round in your head.
    Up till now you've been all alone,
    alone to fall from sanity.
    But now you feel that loving touch,
    the one that's tried to hold you back,
    from falling from the brink,
    to death from insanity.
    That helpful hand and strong presence,
    makes you want to live another day.
    Live to love and relish once more,
    in the life of one not troubled,
    by the weight of reality.
    That loving, caring touch,
    becomes your's once again.
    It makes you want to fight,
    to regain your conciousness.
    Others used to push you forward,
    to make you leave yourself behind.
    Noone ever stopped to lend a hand,
    till now that lifeline wasn't there.
    You must cherish that now,
    lest you ever lose it,
    for without it, fragile your balance becomes.
    Instead you must cling to that which saves,
    and can make a line turn into a wall,
    a wall that protects your fragile sanity.




    Submitted on 2006-03-27 11:48:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Welcome to Elite! This was a good piece about not having hope but finding something in life to be hopeful about.
    You were at an awkward and troubled age at 16 writing this and perhaps you found God and a love that set your heart and soul free to fly and find peace.
    good!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      well i guess it was an ok writing.. i think ypou put some details of feeling in each sentence and that is what i look in a writing.. so a good one and hope you keep writing .. and well dont take it in the wrong way .. but sin some lines it sounded very repetitive.. so you could improve that if you wish ..
    thanks for sahring and if you have time please take a lookk to my writing and welcome to Elite Skills hope you get what you wish from being here..
    peace and love
    and take care
    have a nice day
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]



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