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Submission Name: another nameless one dots

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Author:	Dragonslayer
ASL Info:	22/M/MI
Elite Ratio:	4.17 - 43/39/21
Words:	83

Class/Type:	Random Thoughts/Misc
Total Views:	306
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	383

Description:
just felt like writing this last night

another nameless one dots

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"to the end of the earth i go; walking side by side with ghosts of my past, with no one alive to keep my company. To the end of the world, to the depth's of my own heart. To a heart blackened with pain, and sorrow. To the end of the earth I go, to a place where no one can reach me, where no one can hurt me anymore. To the end of the line, to the end of my own life."

Submitted on 2006-03-27 12:20:29 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the way this sounds in my mind. I think it is nicely done, and would not be bad if lengthened or added into a novella already under way. This is pretty awesome and shows bunches of potential.

You get a 5. (4 for the piece, 1 just for having alf as your picture!)

xoxo
| Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
  When I first read this I felt like I in the move "queen of the damed". Like you were a vampire thats been looking at the world as an outcaste. Unlike the movie; instead of you finding company in the presence of ghosts, you actually want to be alone. Maybe thats telling me about your personality? Is it that your fustrated over poeple or that your just tired of bull[censored] lonllines?

SarahE.P.
| Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by SarahE.P. | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow... Very short, but very full of emotion. "to a place where no one can reach me" -- I love this line! This piece really tugged at my heart, since I know how it feels. Actually the words you chose really reminded me of the poems I used to write... My ways of writing have changed now, but I still remember...

Very nice job. Keep it up!

<3
The Original
| Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by T.O.S.R. | [ Reply to This ]
  Its hard to be alone in a place that is sooooo over populated with people who don't know what birth control or protection is, but i know what you mean if you were to say you feel alone, because often times this is not hard to do. There is lots of good emotion in this piece, but i still think you could add more, another good thing about this piece is even though it wasn't in standard poetry form for some reason your choice of words kept me reading which is a good triat to have. Hope to read more from you soon. Try to have a wonderful day, Ciao amber
| Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by amber_in_wyomin | [ Reply to This ]
  This is an interesting writer
Thou I disagree that you are alone
There is always someone with you such as a memory of the past
That memory is energy which in turn is Life
Use that energy to guide you in your future travels and you will find yourself at peace
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my writes and let ne know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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