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    dots Submission Name: a song of sweet lovedots
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    Author: only_a_dreamX
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 80/66/46
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 157
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1241



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       wow i'm terrible at descriptions.


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    dotsa song of sweet lovedots
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    love notes written on an empty heart
    to a lover far away.
    a broken heart that needs his love
    though far too weak to find it.
    singing a song of sweet romance
    that seems way out of reach.
    as sunlight fades, the shadows grow
    and hide his face from me.
    hoping he might hear my songs,
    i try to raise my voice,
    but broken hearts are limited
    to songs so dark and frail.
    tears begin to softly fall -
    the loneliness consumes me.
    how could anyone find me here
    in death and endless sorrow?
    but suddenly, a song rings through -
    a song like my own echo.
    but different for the voice has changed -
    it pierces through the darkness.
    my mind is racing -
    could it be?
    my love is crying out?
    and singing songs of love, so pure -
    a love to last forever.
    stepping toward the song he sings,
    my broken heart starts beating.
    a smile creeps slowly to my face -
    the sun is finally rising.
    i hear him drawing ever near -
    i'm following after his song
    until at last he's here with me,
    the ressurection of sunlight is complete.




    Submitted on 2006-03-27 15:22:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thought this a good write but the last line was somewhat weak,felt it should of had a stronger ending to go with the momentum of the flow towards the last of this piece ,but then that is just my out look on it,other then that it is a good write as I said
    adnil
    | Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]



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