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    dots Submission Name: Wonderlanddots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 522
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1045



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       I love my husband very much. Critcize me if you will, but many of my poems are about my husband. And yes, I like for my poems to rhyme


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    dotsWonderlanddots
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    Reality leaves me
    I am all alone
    Imagination takes over
    In a place unknown

    Flowers around me
    Bright sun over my head
    Am I in Oz
    Or am I dead?

    I see someone
    Coming straight for me
    Glancing over
    Can it really be he?

    The man comes closer
    He take my hand
    "Welcome my pretty
    To wonderland."

    His voice is familiar
    The touch all the same
    This is my husband
    Jon is his name

    Could I be dreaming
    Or just gone insane?
    Wonderland? Where am I?
    A place with no pain

    I walk with him
    To sites never seen
    Waterfalls and willows,
    This is certainly a dream

    Then I realize whats happening
    I find where I've come
    This is not wonderland
    This is a place named Love.

    Only my Jon and I
    Live in this land
    We stay here forever
    Walking hand in hand




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      Thank you dear, my husband is the light of my life, and I am very glad we don't have one of the horrible relationships you speak of.
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a sweet love poem about your husband. It is nice to read a love poem about two people who are married as there is so much trouble with relationships these days. I think your poem is nicely written and expressed and the rhyme here is good too. You are lucky to be married to a man that you feel this way about and I wish you all the best for a long and happy life together. Welcome to Elite! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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