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    dots Submission Name: Life's Lessondots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Yes, another about my husband, what can I say? I love him


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    dotsLife's Lessondots
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    I stand alone under a cloud of depression
    Learning another of life's many lessons.

    I have to get up with no ones help
    I have to get rid of this all by myself

    No light left in my thoughts anymore.
    Upside down is the smile I wore.

    The cloud grows so much more everyday
    I begin to wonder if it will ever float away

    All of a sudden I feel a pull at my arm
    A person is taking me safe from harm

    I can't see his face, but I recognize the touch
    A feeling I have loved so much

    Running and running, suddenly we stop
    I see he's my husband, and all sadness drops.

    He embraces me, holds me so tight
    All depression is gone, the cloud not in sight.

    We stand under a new cloud, full of wonder
    Under the sky, no rain or thunder.

    Rainbows and birds singing sweet songs
    Under this cloud is where I belong.

    My husband saved me from a life of depression
    Needing the help, life taught me a lesson.

    Doing everything alone isn't always the best
    Help is sometimes needed, one of life's many tests.




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