Again, you did a very good job with this one. I loved the last stanza the most. I could connect with this poem so much it was scary. I loved the way you took us the reader through how the beast effects your everyday life and all around you as well. And how you detailed how it was a struggle to control the beast within. You have certainly written a poem that has depht and realistic meaning to all readers of yours. Good work!
I know talent when I see it. I read one poem of u b4. And it was good, but this one is wayyy better.
I just like how u used the "religious" metaphors to point to a problem within urself. Ur "beast" as u call it.
I'd like to know what warg mean pls, I looked it up but nothing came up.
Back to the poem now: To me it seems like every instinctive impulse that men have. If u let all ur insticts rule, u r freeing the beast, and man won't be a social creature anymore, and the 1st ones he would hurt is the ones he loves.
I like how u drew the war, the poems shows how hard it is without the use of violent words, but uses creative imagery.
I also like how u pictured the coming back in forth in battles. We can see the struggle where the beast wins over u:
In time I give into itís sway. Stand immobilized in fear, Helpless as it desecrates The ones I hold dear.
Then there are times where u wn and control ur beast.
I pull in the reigns, Protection is not worth the toll Of lives that have been battered By the demonic creation of my soul.
I like how u also showed how this attempt to contain ur beast is hurting u inside and how u r trying to not destroy urself and at the same time not destroy the ones u love.
This is what I call a layere poem where each re-read gives u a different thought and a different angle. I can see ur beast as a struggle with alcohol, as temptation to cheat on someone u love, as rage ...
Your poem just has "it". The flow, the imagery, the wording it all formed a full circle. Would not change a thing and welcome to my favorite list.
Humans have not evolved their emotions as has the body evolved. If it weren't for societal inhibitions humans would still be animalistic in nature. Who says humans did not evolve from earlier primates. The answer is obvious that humans have the animal gene. Look about you,everyone wants to be top dog. To speed that process there is hatred,lust, power struggles, bullying and murders to make that top dog ambition come true. The above is what I get out of "The Beast."
i think everyone can relate somewhat to this poem. everyone has a side to them they dont much like or appreciate. and it shames them to let it show. but it's inevitable...it comes out eventually. some more than others.
i know i have a "beast" within me and has recently been unleashed. i would like to say it wasnt me...it was someone else who did the things that i have done. i wish it really was a beast..but it wasnt it was me. it was just hiding somewhere inside of me and it reared its ugly head. and i regret it fully.
you do have to watch yourself. dont let the bad take over the best of you. i like this poem because it is real in a metaphorical sense. and i like that. it is definitely something people can relate to. and i think you've done a good job kind of showing the struggle between the "right" and "wrong" mentality using the "beast"...it's definitely something that can damage relationships with the people you love. so you gotta watch out for it.
i thought this was a good write. ...i dont have much of a critique for it..sorry. but i liked it a lot. :-)