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Submission Name: pathetic dots

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Author:	EEKS
Elite Ratio:	2.84 - 647/1071/601
Words:	87

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	156
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	544

Description:
ugh

pathetic dots

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me plus you doesnt match the equation
too young, too old, too much in love
my feelings for you
real or desperation?

question myself, question you
question reality, faith in feelings
that seem imaginary

stories told of happy endings make me cry
things dont end that way for me
if i dont end up with you
will i cry or will it be relief?

too perfect, too impatient
i cant wait, but i cant leave
love me, before i forget to breathe

Submitted on 2006-03-27 22:36:39 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This has to go in the fav list. I can relate entirely with every line in this poem. The thrill has left me in a previous relationship which has dropped me in the depths of a cold depression. Reading this almost brings a little more relief to me, and please don't take offense to my statement, but it's good for me to see someone besides me facing a similar problem. I'll keep an eye out for more of your stuff.
- the reincarnation of the writer within JR Hoodlum
| Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Death of Death | [ Reply to This ]
i love the feeling in this peom..this is exactly how i am feeling right now...and its so confusing. my favorite line is the last one "love me, before i forget to breathe"...sometimes i do actually forget to breath if im sad enough..

it could probably rhyme more, however the ideas are very clear

i will add this to my favorites
| Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by ghostladynessa | [ Reply to This ]

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