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    dots Submission Name: Escape Routedots
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    Author: Death of Death
    ASL Info:    20 M Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 41/27/10
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 948
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1189



    Description:
       I've been thinking about living on easy street... Go to school full time; fuck working 70 or + hours a week. It's mainly because of her....who's name I prefer not to type. But that means I may have to move back with the folks in TN.... If only I knew I'd be missed, I wouldn't have to think twice..... My heart is still pretty bruised up now.


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    dotsEscape Routedots
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    Waking up to a lie
    believing life in love
    with a feeling one-sided
    leaving one more question mark

    Reaching deeper into insanity
    now with both hands open
    gripping the anger inside
    and pulling out aggression
    While the thought of us
    chokes my optimism
    and all the memories
    breathe heavier in my heart.

    The purest taste of envy
    is chased by heartbreak
    and every broken dream
    that was one time cherished
    ultimately leaves no feeling
    as you poison me with a hollow embrace
    after the light that once shined
    appears as a faint glow

    Keeping off my mind
    what was thought to be love
    the looks we gave
    as the heat grew inside
    and breath was stolen abruptly.
    a sudden change in venue
    reads as the best solution
    but not a word will be spoken
    when emotions continue to grow cold

    It only takes one smooth thought
    or a slightly better feeling
    pray that you're not hurt
    when not one note is left









    Submitted on 2006-03-28 07:02:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The last two stanzas or whatever are my favorite. I felt I could really hold them in my mind for awhile.
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by james110182 | [ Reply to This ]


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