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    dots Submission Name: commercial killer(dissing sinceer)dots
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    Author: PROlifik
    ASL Info:    23/m/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.01 - 23/28/21
    Words: 814
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1427
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 4535



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       called out by SINceer05...my response ha


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    dotscommercial killer(dissing sinceer)dots
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    you wont give up will you
    sooner or later you gonna realize this will kill you
    i got talent coming out of the speakers like the "bass do"
    your embaressed look at your face dude,you outta place dude
    the game aint gonna miss you i can replace you,i'll waste you
    copy and paste you,gave you a verse i laced you-i wont leave till i get a thank you
    its not that i hate you-i MADE you,gave birth to your style i RAISED you
    not phased by you,gave you 2 verses i amazed you,with no praise dude i'll blaze you
    now you out for my glory?,im golden homie,let me tell the public my story
    let me start-heres my mic-HOLD IT FOR ME
    in the past have i won??-thats pretty self-explainatory matter a fact its manditory for me
    so for the fans heres more ah me,they love to adore me,close ya eyes kids its about to get gory
    you wanna be edgar allen poe no flow having ho man its time for you to go
    damn i know that was low but its my show,so just breathe slow you weak ho
    dont speak tho,just repeat those till the speaker blows at weaker foes you just got megar flows
    with one bar one paragraph ill kick your ass fast past your last blast ill blast back
    you lack the craft ill sit back and listin for the studio auidence laugh
    as you feel my wrath this will be the last class you try to pass before i witness your career crash real fast
    you can be poetic i'll give you a lil credit,but ya battle??i read it and damn your gonna regret it
    speed dial the medic to protect it yea i said it-your lyrics are just plain pathetic
    this is my favorite past time but im spitting at you for the last time your not even as strong as your last line
    no way in hell are you past mine,my lyrics collapse time my rhymes are refined so in no ways could you clap mine
    im big game hunting on fake rappers fronting-wait sinceer why are you running???isnt your response coming??
    haaaaa its funny to me how i got your whole auidence running to me
    now you tryin to be a benzino,please ho-knowing damn well im everything you need tho
    let me proceed tho on this weak ho
    Poser Diaries...please homie you admire me,you aint the boss of the game you cant fire me
    put me on a track you tried to hire me,you aint higher than me go try to find someone flyer than me
    so lets sit back let the votes start flowin-damn SINCEER where you goin??
    i can give a fuck what you post to boast-"when i reach the coast your death is on approach??"
    please man you couldnt come close at the most
    i dont need no influence to do this,i truley rule this another fool to diss im cool with this
    like i said theres no hate in here just to make it clear you aint gonna leave here
    yellow tape and a tear ill create your biggest fear your fate is near welcome to +cape fear+ you dont wanna wake up here
    aint no one fake here,im battlin YOU i got nothing at stake here
    so you best inhale ya weed indeed before you begin to read just know im claiming that number one seed
    2 solo posts with just as many fans as you????thats wild yo,you quote me in your profile tho
    explain that,ill street and unbreakable ima claim that,I BROUGHT YOUR FAME BACK at the same time brought the game back,put my name in that- you LAME act,ill blast ya brains back lyrics bent ya frame back
    i couldnt picture us on the same track,matter fact dont mention my name in the same rap the throne homie i regin that
    you just sprayin that the same rap,same crap-fuck that,ive had enough of that-tryin to act tough with a gat cuz you dont have enough with the raps i guess your the shit cuz your just spittin crap,what evers writtin is whack
    just cuz you gotta deal in no ways makes you real,your still not rhymin shit they feel cuz its just words you steal
    damn i dont wanna stop because i can go on for days,in many ways i can leave ya pen ina daze
    so stop throwin rocks attempting to end your writters block its your choice to mock, one worng move ill shatter your voice box
    so in closing its a peacful statement im purposing for you to quit with your poseing cause that shit-- im not condoning
    im takin shots at you-aiming and reloading watching my rhymes as there exploding as your career is unfolding
    so wipe ya eyes time to see clearly-you have been beatin its OVER +SINceer+ly




    Submitted on 2006-03-28 07:13:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey babe,
    lovin your work and your style,
    you got sum real good lines in there, dont see how u can lose with those beats on the streets,
    keep um cummin
    kyrenia
    x x x x
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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