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    dots Submission Name: Torndots
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    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 778
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    dotsTorndots
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    I cry with bleeding tears
    I cancel out my fears
    I scream with sore voices
    I spread way my choices
    As I deteriorate because of love
    I give you my last dying growth
    I wish for a better man
    To find him if only i can
    I found a bright yellow candle
    Burning with orange flames
    I saw a silent wax
    In my dark room with no room
    I found a little slip of paper
    Burnt to be ashes soon
    I held it before the candle
    I whispered those tearing words
    "Save me before the floor gets me
    Save me after the floor found me
    Save me when i no longer found glee
    Save me whoever sees me"

    I tore the tearing words




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