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    dots Submission Name: Act of Contritiondots
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    Author: BreakAndFall
    ASL Info:    18/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 115/153/59
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    Description:
       Again, written on retreat. It was a silent one, and I found it funny how we were all so afraid to keep the silence.


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    dotsAct of Contritiondots
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    Why are we so terrified of silence?
    Are we afraid to let our souls be free?
    Relying on the noise to be our safeguard,
    Afraid that God will want to speak to me.

    What if He urges us to change our lives?
    Can I give up the things I've come to love?
    I'm so afraid of letting You take over,
    To place my trust in the plan from up above.

    No, I cannot give in, I refuse!
    There is too much risk of pain and tears!
    Now, I can hide beneath the shadows,
    I can't destroy what I've built up for years

    Give me the strength to trust in You
    Grant me the grace to surrender completely
    I hope you will forgive me of my sins
    Let me return to you on bended knee




    Submitted on 2006-03-28 09:47:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That was really good Jenn. You did a great job. I understand how you feel...it sounded very much like you wrote this from expirience which I guess you did.
    | Posted on 2006-04-09 00:00:00 | by Sarah J | [ Reply to This ]
      Good scheme, message presented well, and altogether well written. I can't really point out any grammarical or structural errors, which is a rare find. Keep up the writing.
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Flynn | [ Reply to This ]
      The reflection of this poem does a very sound job of bringing fear from its dark recesses into the light of God's love. Your insights were very candid and real. I enjoyed this a great deal.
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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