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    dots Submission Name: Gone to the graveyarddots
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    Author: bbcakes1115
    ASL Info:    22/f/ut
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35/27/16
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 955
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 329



    Description:
       Just passed a cemetary and thought about this.


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    dotsGone to the graveyarddots
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    Gone to the graveyard
    because I died today
    Yes, I'm gone to the graveyard
    to seek the lords name

    I took my happiness with me
    Yes, my soul was set free
    Gone to the graveyard
    at last I rest in peace
    Yes, I'm gone to the graveyard
    because I died today




    Submitted on 2006-03-28 10:48:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i think you should explore thisn topic imean put more details on your writing it has a lot of potential but .. at the ending you sound very repetitive .. dont take it in the wrong way i am just giving an advice
    thanks for sharing and i hope you can read more from me soon and i would be glad that you comment on one of my writings...
    peace and love
    take care
    and have a nice day
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't like this. I think it might've been because it was so short. It needs to be a lot longer I think...Just my opinion though...
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]


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