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    dots Submission Name: Letting Godots
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    Author: bbcakes1115
    ASL Info:    22/f/ut
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35/27/16
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 996
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    Description:
       To my parents! When I was a senior in high school I wrote this to them and they both cried but understood.


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    dotsLetting Godots
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    You can't control me anymore
    I'm making my own decisions
    Stepping out on my own two feet

    Taking the leap of a lifetime
    Laying out the road before me
    Learn to let go!

    I want to be free
    Free of the safety net you've made
    I loove you for all you've done for me
    Although it's time

    Time to let me sprout wings
    Ang fly like and eagle.




    Submitted on 2006-03-28 10:52:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well a common feeling which comes when we get to the early twenties
    i think you expressed good but you should improveit .. it just sound too common .. i suggest you could put more metaphores and stuff like that ...
    well keep writing and hope you can read my stuff soon
    thanks for sharing
    peace and love
    and have a nice day
    take care
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]


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