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    dots Submission Name: La Muerte de Mi Amordots
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    Author: Midnight_Rose
    ASL Info:    18//Male//Chicago, IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 121/149/40
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1313
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    Description:
       This was inspired by Poe's "The Raven." I know it's not the as good but I'm 17. He was old when he made "The Raven" so there. lol Enjoy

    For those who don't read Spanish, it means The Death of My Love.


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    dotsLa Muerte de Mi Amordots
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    Mourning for my love.
    That night I lay awake
    Shedding a tear for you,
    Longing for that touch I so desire
    From your smooth soft hands.
    Reminiscing of the kiss from your lips
    And crying out
    "Mi Amor, Mi Amor!"

    Sitting in my room
    Accompanied by the pictures on the wall
    Smiling at me,
    Speaking to me
    In a language only I understand;
    A dead word,
    Silent.

    I hold you close.
    Remembering the days
    We walked together
    In the mid-day sun.
    I feel the breeze.
    It's warm.
    I love it
    Mi Amor. Mi Amor.

    It's cold now.
    It's dark now.
    She's gone now
    And forever
    And I'm alone
    In the shadows
    Mourning for you,
    Longing for that touch I so desire
    From your smooth soft hands.
    Mi Amor. Mi Amor.




    Submitted on 2006-03-28 14:56:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this poem. It reminds me of how I feel for a lost love. You're a good writer. Your words are very powerful. By themselves and as verse and stanza.

    Good Write
    Ghost
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Ghost Child | [ Reply to This ]
      umm....yea i like! but.....question? is this based on true facts or what? sorry marc im kinda slllloooowwww u know that
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by eMo_AnGeL | [ Reply to This ]
      spelling errors: moarning: "mourning/morning" sheding: "shedding".. change the line to "longing FOR that touch" "Reminscing OF/ABOUT that kiss" and the word moarning again. Overall, good in a picturesque way, very gothic. Twould be cool if you incorporated more espanol. :) but maybe I'm biased.
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by franksinatra | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved the opening/closing statements, truly unique. Its a common emotion, loss. but it seems that you are starting to tap into a new way to approch that emotion Kudos
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by SlanderousLust | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. I liked how you brought the beggining lines to the bottom and ended with them.
    It deffinetly captured my attention.
    Great write :D
    *-_-*Miss*-_-*
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]


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