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Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118 /154 /45
Words: 84
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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just reflecting on life.. it isnt superbly written.. just my thoughts penned down..


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we can't ever be the same
my world is in a mess
but i think we're gonna be all right

life as we know it is history
their is darkness in the day
but i think we may just be all right

flowers wilt in front of my eyes
trees break and crash
but i think i'm gonna be all right

life can be beautiful
we need to find the best in the storm
then we'll definately be all right




Submitted on 2006-03-28 15:35:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmmm...sounds like a moment when a person realizes the devastation in the world brought on by either themselves or someone else is just a part of life, ya know? No matter how things end up its gonna be what it is...alright or not alright...depends on how a person views it. Very nice and thought provoking write. And written well.
| Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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