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    dots Submission Name: A Past To Hidedots
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    Author: siroez
    ASL Info:    22/Male/WV
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 68/67/32
    Words: 278
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 201
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1598



    Description:
       this poem is about hiding something in your past, and loss of love. its a very in depth poem. any feedback is welcome.


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    dotsA Past To Hidedots
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    a past to hide

    ive lost everything to live for
    so tell me why im still alive
    i plead with the stars
    to give me a reason to live
    and i often cry, its hard not to
    when you see nothing but reasons to die
    still searching and repeating
    as i continue to walk down my road
    ive groan o so tired of this tedious path
    its hard to be without a meaning
    and its hard to walk when you cant feel your legs
    i let out silent screams everday
    hoping someone will hear me
    i know someone out there feels my pain
    you can see it just by looking in my eyes
    and its getting to the point
    where i cant look in the mirror
    because my spirit trys to break free
    i feel it toss and turn inside me
    gasping for air, its so scary
    ive let out vengefull roars
    as i pull knives out my back
    knives, that ive put there myself
    the black blood gushes to the ground
    and covers my feet up to my ankles
    the ceiling cracks and opens up
    as i begin to beg the stars
    to bring me someone who will save me
    but they have not yet replied
    perhaps i deserve this
    i no longer believe im a good person
    since afterall i am the one
    who made this all worsen
    and im the one who scratches my scars
    wide open, as i wait in my prison
    traveling on this dirt road alone
    with nothing, but my shadow to my back
    and the bright gleaming sun
    staring me in my cold rotton face.




    Submitted on 2006-03-28 15:42:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is rather provocitive for me because I battle the same feelings on a daily basis. Though i do not want to agree with your point of view, I feel the same things often enough. It's been the main point of my life for a long time to simply forget the feeings of the uselessness of life. (this has nothing to do with poetry but....) I sugest that you tell yourself that no matter what happens in life that you'll handle it...that you're a capable adult (even if you're "Underage") and that you are strong enough to enjoy what life hands you good or bad....
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by SlanderousLust | [ Reply to This ]


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