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    dots Submission Name: collabo with bridgettdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 453
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1524



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       this is some shit, that me and my homegirl bridgett started....I got anxious and went ahead and posted it...it needs alot more work


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    dotscollabo with bridgettdots
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    (shanxxx)
    when wind ceases to stop/
    and blood runs cold/
    I feel my heart drop/
    and then time will unfold/
    what will I do? is the test/
    experimenting with will/
    I am the best of the best, I have the liscense to kill/

    you gotta speak for yourself/
    and know what you do/
    be true to what's been dealt/
    so it be true to you/

    (bridgett)
    thinking is almost a procedure/
    killing is an overtaken will/
    we all have words, and we all feel/
    reflection in the mirror, makes the inner core of a follower become the leader/

    don't take whath feels plentiful at the time, that feels dead. people die with time, don't trip souls. before their final fall.

    (shanxxx)
    I'm glorified security/
    taking my aim/
    with me is the majority/
    so the rebel is to blame/
    all there is to do now is take up your name/
    blood of the people, commander in chief up at the reigns/

    (bridgett)
    Bang-Bang! goes the blow of enforcement/
    when your sophisticated, with heavy feet/
    dry minds make life the wrong expirement/
    complicated and the falling of stages/
    some shit doesn't make sense/
    you gotta make an impression that will effect the starting point of suicidal ages/
    make you words cheap, but keep'em underestemated/
    in the end you will cahnge the dying flows/




    Submitted on 2006-03-28 17:54:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok this is almost amazing. it needs work. both of y'all did good on this one. but u need to fix it. i can't say exactly what's wrong with it. it just seems to be lacking something. i think it would be tight to hear this one out loud though
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      shannx verses were real nice. They had flow and had good rhymes rhymes. But your right overall this needs a lot of work. "rap" it up and post the revised.

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    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


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