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    dots Submission Name: Echodots
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    Author: kjb
    ASL Info:    21/male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 256/351/64
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 524
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 408



    Description:
       ok don't yell at me i know its short but thats the way i want it. hope it is enjoyed.


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    dotsEchodots
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    Give me crying tears
    and hope will be given
    dry those eyes and the future is held
    palms cupped over your face
    Your crying
    the wet streams drip from your
    sorrowful hands
    try to get past it
    they all say the same
    you can't run from an echo
    but still just live through it
    two hearts
    four hands
    too many tears




    Submitted on 2004-05-05 15:36:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it started off good in the first two lines, and then kind of got dragged out about the crying, crying crying...but once you changed it up at the end it was nice. i love the way you played off the numbers at the end:

    "Two hearts
    Four hands
    Too many tears"

    that made the poem for me.
    | Posted on 2004-11-14 00:00:00 | by cre_dia | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS IS SO SHORT!? Yah, joke. Haha. Yet...its just so...deep right now. It's like the innocence of being able to cover up your eyes and ears to make the world go away, yet in reality it's never truely gone. Awesome, Kevin!
    | Posted on 2004-11-03 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      WHY IS THIS SO SHORT!!!!!!!???????? haha, just kidding. I always do what you tell me not too, hehe. This is cute, I like it, the end especially, its cute. I can see how you cannot run from an echo, what about just sitting still and covering your ears, lol. nice work.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]



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