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    dots Submission Name: Pleasure Is Paindots
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    Author: deathbelow
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 34/43/17
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       MMM....well..I guess just read it and youll get it...


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    dotsPleasure Is Paindots
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    Like a needle cold in my vein,
    Your a breath of fresh air
    Igniting this fucking flame
    Id die and still you'd be there
    You could sow my eyes shut with blood red string and whisper goodbye,
    Your all that I hate,
    Your one big fucking lie.
    Close the swelling doors and lock each deadbolt tight,
    I'd still fuck you like I did last night
    But you tighten
    Like a nuse that burns around my neck
    I fuckin loved you more than the rest
    You liked it when I screamed your name,
    When I fucken screamed your name in vain,
    Cause pleasure is pain
    But this pain isn't pleasure the same
    It hurts to my rotten core,
    to the center of the piece of shit you are,
    But still Id give anything to be there again
    Have bloody scratches at my skin
    Id strip and sell my pale white flesh
    Just to be with you in bed
    Your the best fuckin lie I've ever told
    The best story I've ever stole
    Fighting out one last bloody cry
    Your just one big fucking LIE.




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      I love it. It's so powerful, your feeling. It kinda reminds me of my poem "lust" but a harsher longer verson. I kinda know what you mean. You just hate it but you also need it.
    Awsome write hun,
    -Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      great oh my good i love this its just so full of feeling and anger it would seem from all that ive read so far also nuse should be noose i love this work oh my god its like hmmm well i dont' know how exactly to put it so i won't try but i love it..
    Vynom
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
      wll this writing has many emotions in itself.. i think of one of the best writings i have read today... well ... you did it man ...
    well and talking about this topic well women do many things that they wish and said they did not do ... so when that happens, we just have to stop loving her and find another girl... while searching, you just have to say that you love her even though you have stopped loving her..
    so thanks for sharing and i think it is very helpful for men that can relate to this write!
    and if you have time pleae take a look to my writing and please leave a comment on them ...
    peace and love
    and have nice day
    take care
    Victor
    p.d. : keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is so emotion filled an di can feel the hate and longing in it as my eyes read every word.....i love the feeling i get when i read this. its soo powerful... keep up the good work

    <3 adi
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      there is alot of emotion in this... i like it, it is brutally and painstakingly honest. awesome,there is so much hate and longing in the words.
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by ghostladynessa | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one of the most intense poems i have read. Its so brutelly discriptive. It bites at you but you cant stop reading it. Thank you for sharing it with us.

    AL
    | Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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