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Author: Linkins_knot
ASL Info:    14/Male/Behind a Computer
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Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I wrote a list of words and put the into a poem..


My heart is a shrapnel
Ticking, ready to explode (again)
Saturated with terror
This bomb has no control

It's like a cabal in my heart
Filled with abomination
My heart is hybrid
One side near elimination

I pursuit to be provacative
But it was abduct
I can't be liberated
I'm out of luck

I'm mostly filled with resentment
Annoyed of the obnoxious
I'm tattered in my mind
I'm thoughtless

A bunch of these people are mischievous
It's leading to a nightmare, an Incubus
It's compelling an Abduction

Taking away my liberation
Inside lives an intrigue
it begins to bane
whats left of me...

Submitted on 2006-03-28 21:12:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey thanks for da stalk!! this poem had really good rhyming i suck at rhymin but u did a pretty good job!! um.. w/e u classify poem is ur buisness!good joB!
| Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Good work on the rhyming, but I don't really get this poem. In your discription, it says it's just a bunch of words you put together to make a poem, but poetry isn't just about words. It's about expressing yourself.
| Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by imaginarylight6 | [ Reply to This ]

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