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    dots Submission Name: Regurgitated crow feathersdots
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    Author: Rue
    ASL Info:    16/F/the dark side
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 244/182/44
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/Angry
    Total Views: 939
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 88



    Description:
       Haiku?... Alright. The original purpose of the haiku limitation was to force the author to distill his or her verse to its most essential elements. In turn the reader has to use their imagination to gain a deeper insight to the haiku. This is how I feel when I'm all, ignored by a crow.


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    dotsRegurgitated crow feathersdots
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    Your thought makes me purge
    Unbearably repulsive
    Die away from me.




    Submitted on 2006-03-29 06:00:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nicely done. I personally didn't even know that you could do a haiku like this. I'm sort of what you would call a traditionalist when it comes to haiku and I don't tend to experiment with them. But seeing you do this, sort of stirs me to want to try something.

    Keep it up
    Take care

    Jason
    | Posted on 2006-05-14 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that this causes the reader to think.

    The thoughts aren't very pleasant, but that also captures the intent of the poem. That has got to mean this is a success.

    I once used the word puke in a poem. I thought it might put poeple off. It turned out to be the first piece I had published in an anthology.

    Nice work on this.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      I find it crazy and strange that I am going to be forced to leave a comment that is longer that the work itself...I think it would be safe to say that you are really pissed at this person.

    I love the title. It just puts forth the thought that you are choking on this person, on their actions, their lies, their mere existence in your life...Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, I does make the reader think, it's thought-provoking; even if the thought is ucky. bleh.
    I saw the title and just had to see what the geep it meant, but now I see the only thing it has in common with the actual haiku is that they're both gross. You misspelled the word 'unbearably' on line 2...but I only knew that because I have Spell Check

    Anyways, interesting write, it's actually quite original.

    avril54~trini~slef~

    (please don't feel obligated to give me a comment in return, my % could be much better! thanx )
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]


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