Sandalwood and Lemonade by Rue

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Submission Name: Sandalwood and Lemonade dots

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Author:	Rue
ASL Info:	16/F/the dark side
Elite Ratio:	4.54 - 244/182/44
Words:	43

Class/Type:	Poetry/Happy
Total Views:	793
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	299

Description:
We were at the stonnington fair. He was just like, "You dropped this." And handed me an incense cone. It was sandalwood. He was the lemonade stand guy. And when I got home I had an extra incent.

Sandalwood and Lemonade dots

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Little white tank top,
Kickin' over soda pop,
Fight, for our right, to par-ty,
Really really really cute car-ni,
Deep Purple in the air,
Never had a better time at the fair,
Lemonade stands,
Fearless hands,
What a day, what a day.

Submitted on 2006-03-29 06:12:37 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I had an experience like this...but mine was in Walmart and it was with my current boyfriend. Amazing the things that sandalwood can do eh? I love this poem ...it was sweet and captured a bit of purity in its simplicity.
| Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  That was a cute poem. I definately enjoyed this one and smiled when I read it. Good write! Keep it up, and keep on entertaining us eliteskills addicts lol.
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]
  very very magical.

i'm gonna have to learn to write rhythmically like that.

why isnt there more. now I'm sad.
but wonderful as is.
yep.

~Paco
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Blaargh | [ Reply to This ]
  hey, Rue, you're getting very poetical here, I like it a lot.

After reading your story in the descrip, I could tell what you were describing in the poem. Very catchy beat, too.

Excellent work, light and bubbly, just like your lemonade (guy)

be happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  This resembles a song lyric or chant of sorts. It seems all too short. You were just getting the reader warmed up and "poof" you were gone.

It sounds like you had a blast.
| Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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