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    dots Submission Name: Sandalwood and Lemonadedots

    Author: Rue
    ASL Info:    16/F/the dark side
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 244/182/44
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 891
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       We were at the stonnington fair. He was just like, "You dropped this." And handed me an incense cone. It was sandalwood. He was the lemonade stand guy. And when I got home I had an extra incent.

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    dotsSandalwood and Lemonadedots

    Little white tank top,
    Kickin' over soda pop,
    Fight, for our right, to par-ty,
    Really really really cute car-ni,
    Deep Purple in the air,
    Never had a better time at the fair,
    Lemonade stands,
    Fearless hands,
    What a day, what a day.

    Submitted on 2006-03-29 06:12:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I had an experience like this...but mine was in Walmart and it was with my current boyfriend. Amazing the things that sandalwood can do eh? I love this poem ...it was sweet and captured a bit of purity in its simplicity.
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a cute poem. I definately enjoyed this one and smiled when I read it. Good write! Keep it up, and keep on entertaining us eliteskills addicts lol.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]
      very very magical.

    i'm gonna have to learn to write rhythmically like that.

    why isnt there more. now I'm sad.
    but wonderful as is.

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Blaargh | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, Rue, you're getting very poetical here, I like it a lot.

    After reading your story in the descrip, I could tell what you were describing in the poem. Very catchy beat, too.

    Excellent work, light and bubbly, just like your lemonade (guy)

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This resembles a song lyric or chant of sorts. It seems all too short. You were just getting the reader warmed up and "poof" you were gone.

    It sounds like you had a blast.
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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