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    dots Submission Name: JUST THAT GIRLdots
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    Author: SingleRose
    ASL Info:    20/F/Phila
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 96/82/31
    Words: 514
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsJUST THAT GIRLdots
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    Iím just the girl that washes the dishes
    half assed and half clean
    dirty,
    somethingís always left still dirty
    smudged out and written again

    Iím just the one that you look at
    you donít see me
    I lay naked before you
    and you look beyond me,
    sometimes just eye to eye then walk away
    clothing like pages, never tripped or
    engaged with

    I'm just the girl that calls in the lateÖ
    too late in the
    afternoon to bother you
    in the morning iím just that ring
    that aggravates for a while

    Iím just the girlÖyou donít miss me
    you just bitch me and twist me
    and put me away
    Iím just the girl you fix me and
    break me, my silence
    my ignorance of your talking
    Iím floating with nothing to say
    staring at silence, weíve embraced
    and left you, weíve both gone away

    Iím just the girl that cries when youíre mad
    Iím just the one that hasnít left
    like you thought i would
    too stay too loudly
    youíre not too happy, too bad

    Iím just the one that you lie next to
    and bitch about the one that
    steals all the blankets and kisses you
    goodbye every morning, you just roll
    over and snore, thatís what love
    is this love all about?
    what am i for? here and there i abhor

    I'm just the one that flips through
    the box full of channels
    Iím too fast, past,
    past the basketball noise
    Iím just a girl, and i donít light up like neon
    I donít inhale along with the boys

    Iím just the girl affixed to
    a lap topped with keys
    opening up no door
    Iím just the intellectual book
    you canít crack
    youíve graduated
    and graduates donít read anything
    more not me iím not me anymoreÖ

    Iím just the girl that doesnít
    wear aprons or walk along with the dog
    iím just the oil you have to check
    the flat tire to change
    the picture cracked, beheaded chefís
    and tiggerless heads are just neck
    itís all normal, somehow itís lost
    all itís former strange

    iím just the girl
    the one you caressed
    my cheek remembers your name
    every now and again
    want to go lay down?
    lay down againÖ
    againÖ
    and letísÖyeah and again

    I'm just the girl
    that you donít know
    just the girl not
    good enough
    Iím just the girl you
    wonder about, talk about
    walking doubt and shout
    and go out with somebody
    else, not myself

    iím just the girl
    not a toy
    like a ball without a bat
    iím little to joy

    Iím just the girl that talks in the dark
    I'm just the girl with one friend,
    no end, and no beginning no conclusion
    Iím nothingÖyouíre always gone
    gone away
    the end









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      a bit long and ranting and almost lost me but I liked the ending. not sure what advice I could give though, kinda like asking the plumber to fix the VCR
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by caveman | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa I feel that women are made to be this too much these days
    Its not right or fair for that matter
    I loved it
    the ryhme confused me at sometimes tho
    but It was still amazing
    definitley a fav
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by xSaraHx | [ Reply to This ]
      That's an interesting poem. I liked it. The ending was really cool. In alot of poems they repeat a certain line. I think it adds to it. :) Good job.
    *-_-*Miss*-_-*
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]


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