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    dots Submission Name: Knows Nothingdots
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    Author: Star
    ASL Info:    15 F WI
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125/127/42
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 740
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 616



    Description:
       umm yeah i dunno what to make of it you tell me what you think


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    dotsKnows Nothingdots
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    She sat back and looked
    at all of the blood
    surrounding her
    Noticing the metallic smell
    in the air as she stirred
    She had finally done
    what she had sworn to do
    the bastard thought he
    could touch her again
    He had another thing coming
    She recalled the smug expression on his youthful face,the cocky swagger in his hips
    She looked over at him now
    his eyes had been wide in horror
    he never realized
    what was coming
    never knew the pain he caused her
    well now he knew nothing
    now he felt nothing




    Submitted on 2006-03-29 15:28:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The ending really worked in this poem. I think that the topic is very serious and hopefully a thought. But a good write.
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by DEFyuare | [ Reply to This ]


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