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Knows Nothing

Author: Star
ASL Info:    15 F WI
Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125 /127 /42
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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umm yeah i dunno what to make of it you tell me what you think

Knows Nothing

She sat back and looked
at all of the blood
surrounding her
Noticing the metallic smell
in the air as she stirred
She had finally done
what she had sworn to do
the bastard thought he
could touch her again
He had another thing coming
She recalled the smug expression on his youthful face,the cocky swagger in his hips
She looked over at him now
his eyes had been wide in horror
he never realized
what was coming
never knew the pain he caused her
well now he knew nothing
now he felt nothing

Submitted on 2006-03-29 15:28:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The ending really worked in this poem. I think that the topic is very serious and hopefully a thought. But a good write.
| Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by DEFyuare | [ Reply to This ]

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