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    dots Submission Name: Strengthdots
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    Author: ERA
    ASL Info:    25/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 19/14/17
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1309
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 486



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       This is how I feel about the power of woman to a man.


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    dotsStrengthdots
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    Wrap your arms around a guy that is doing all he can in life

    With one gesture it could mean the world to him and make it all worth the while

    A woman can provide many different feelings inside the heart of a strong man

    His strength can be determined on who is standing by his side

    So donít ever leave the side of a man who will always be true

    Youíre his strength, his life, his reason, his glue




    Submitted on 2006-03-29 18:24:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ya know, I like the overall meaning behind this poem. You speak a lot of truth with your words. This world is so full of superficiality and some place so much worth on monetary value that the purest most valuable things become second best. It is a shame. A person is only as good as his word, and his morals and values. How you treat someone means so much more than how much money you have, or how physically attractive you are. I learned this as I grew up and what a valuable lesson it is! I base a persons value to me on how they treat me and what they stand for. How trustworthy they are and their values mean more to me than any amount of money. I do have a suggestion for this poem. I think it could benefit from a different form. It reads more like long sentences rather than a poem in my opinion. I would suggest breaking up these lines a bit. But other than that, this is very nicely written with a good strong message. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is the pure truth, i can feel this peice its really good and i think its a instant fav and well the yeah a girl that truly loves a man or a man loves a girl does power them both
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by robbie | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, Eddie.. how can one say so much in such few words? This is wonderful.. and a refeshing look on how a "man" sees things about love.
    I like the purety of it. It speaks to me in a real way. I can tell it was written from the heart.
    Just the first line itself is powerful..and continues in that fashion throughout.

    Very nice work!
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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