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Submission Name: 21 years dots

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Author:	chikaz4life
ASL Info:	21/f
Elite Ratio:	4.64 - 15/16/5
Words:	76

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	171
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	485

Description:
a reflection of somethings gone through

21 years dots

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Her birthday fast approaches
Oh how fast 21 years has past
Lived upon this earth
Filled with happiness, pain
And tears as well as love
Anger and fear.
Her girl hood dreams
There is nothing but a sweet memory
As her innocence was long ago taken
There is nothing rose colored
As she thinks of the little girl
Who would be five
And the exchange of vows
That will never take place

Submitted on 2006-03-29 18:36:57 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is very touching, very sad. I can relate to certain parts, especially about the child. It is very scary, very hard, but worse when you never actually get the chance to have that child (if you're interested, you can read my poems "Memories Remain" to understand a little better what I mean by that). It has almost been a year for me, I'm 17 now, but it still hurts to think about it. Anyway, this was a nice write that I can definitely relate to. Great job. ...bb...

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~Tayla~
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a good poem. It says so much in not many words and captures many years of life experiences in a short little poem. This sounds very difficult as this person, perhaps you, has gone through a lot and you are young. I cant imagine having a child at 16 years old and how scary that must be. There could be many interpretations to your words. I hope my analysis isnt too far off what you were saying here. It sounds like you have faced many challenges so far in your life. Best wishes to you. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Your poem is heartfelt. It seems to have so much in it and yet, there is so much missing. Having a child at 16 must have been hard enough especially if you are on your own. The poem makes me wonder whether the child was put up for adoption because there was no father present or whether a cruel twist of fate took the father and child from the mother. Whatever, the middle part is, I feel it is especially painful for you and you have revealed only the surrounding, more bearable parts, or is it the other way round? Either way, it's a lovely but sad write. Take care. Mel.
| Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]
  It would seem that your writing is of deep sadness and sorrow for the loss of a child. Even though many years have past their is still the memories that continue to visit...especially when the childs birthday comes along. I personally have a close friend who's 16 year old son was killed in a car accident. Every year she can't help but ponder in the pain of her loss. A death of a child for the parents must be one of the most of heartfelt pains experienced by a human being. This writing carries all of those thoughts to the continual conclusion of what could have been a wonderful life. Kenny Chesney has a song out on his latest CD that also tells this story. Everytime I hear it I think of my friend and her son. I can feel the pain. God Bless. Dennis
| Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Daokao | [ Reply to This ]

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