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    dots Submission Name: Let Godots
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    Author: rAbit
    ASL Info:    18/m/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 84/91/38
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 785
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    Bytes: 651



    Description:
       ...trying to let go...
    obviously..can't...
    anyone sense obsession?


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    dotsLet Godots
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    My ghost of a damned memory
    Haunts thoughts of sleep
    But still to see her face
    Close my eyes and
    Fall asleep
    Misery plagues the dreams
    Wrist cut bleeding
    Pill after pill
    Induced love spells
    Remember the days
    Every incision cut through the deepest veins
    just for you
    Bleeding to death
    Eyes rolled back
    Canít remember
    It was All for you
    The words of black
    still remains today
    Memories never fade
    Just the picture of youíre face
    Every night falling asleep
    Just for you
    Never to let go




    Submitted on 2006-03-29 21:26:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      obsession....umm, yes, I think so...but hey, I've dabbled in it also... I agree with forevertorn about the best lines...these are my favorite also:

    My ghost of a damned memory
    Haunts thoughts of sleep
    But still to see her face
    Close my eyes and
    Fall asleep

    What, do all the darker works come out at night? Cause I haven't read anything like this during the day. Well, this is a lovely little ditty about obsession...great job!
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is something I really like. I've definently felt like I've given everything I have for someone, only to have them leave. I've dated my share of jerks and liars.

    I like the sadness. My favourite lines:

    My ghost of a damned memory
    Haunts thoughts of sleep
    But still to see her face
    Close my eyes and
    Fall asleep


    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by forevertorn | [ Reply to This ]


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