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Submission Name: Not Today dots

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Author:	forevertorn
ASL Info:	16.f.california
Elite Ratio:	3.41 - 21/30/19
Words:	116

Class/Type:	Misc/Serious
Total Views:	126
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	701

Description:
Just, bored on the computer really. Thinking about if he ever went through with leaving, i know part of him wants to.

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"You're my little piece of summer," She said to him, every day.

But summer dies, and nothing lasts forever.
The new slowly becomes the old, future becomes the past. Flowers open, then they close. Everything dies, nothing lasts.

"Your eyes are the sunshine," She used to say, every day.

But sunshine doesn't linger, and nothing stays forever. The birds migrate to the south, the tide washes away. The winds steal the fallen leaves. Nothing ever stays.

It's cold and dark, this long winter, with no company but the moon. She now has nothing left to say. Not a word, not today.

Submitted on 2006-03-29 23:28:22 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  that was wonderful....yet....summer does last forever....and the sunshine does as well. Just because it is cold here...doesn't mean it is not warm some where else on this globe. And even if the sun goes down at times....it still shines upon another face.

This peace was rather simple...yet complex at the same time. I like the way that you put this together.

Me....I am one that always sees the positive. That's what my comment is based off of.

Beautiful job!

Much love,

Li Li
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was rather morose and depressing. The writing was very competent and used good imagery. It just hugged hoplessness a little too closely.
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
  Sad. But so unfortunately true. Its sad to have a loved one leave us, fade away, whether by force or by their own choice, but its something we all have to deal with. I really enjoyed the emotion behind this, it really let me walk in your shoes for a time.
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, wait, not a poem...I'm not sure what it is...This is really beautiful...I just had to say something more...It's just very pretty...I wish I could say more...
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
  This is beautiful...I wish I could say something deep and profound about it, but I'm not up to the challenge today...These are my favorite lines...

But summer dies, and nothing lasts forever.
The new slowly becomes the old, future becomes the past. Flowers open, then they close. Everything dies, nothing lasts.

Letting go is so hard...unbelievably hard...I still haven't been able to do it...This is a beautiful poem...
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked this...its hard to let go of something even when you're forced to. those seem to be the hardest things to let go of actually....relationships come and go, just as everything you wrote about so nicely...but take comfort in knowing you can never leave yourself no matter how hard you try sometimes
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]

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