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    dots Submission Name: The Right Pathdots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 471
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 872



    Description:
       This is my latest, wrote it a few days ago and read it over and over. I have changed nothing about it, let me know if I should. Let me know exactly what you think, won't hurt my feelings.


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    dotsThe Right Pathdots
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    Bruises so deep they hurt to the bone
    Memories created them, will never be gone

    Time can't heal them, love has tried
    Can't count how many times I 've cried

    Following me around, haunting my mind
    These pains are one of a kind.

    I took the wrong path, one bad decision
    Faced my demons, head on collision

    I fixed what I could, dealt with the rest.
    Failed so many, but passed a few tests.

    Pick up the pieces, repair them all
    Never again will I fall

    Nothing else matters, I will do what I must
    I will only take a path I know I can trust.

    My bruises fade, I walk with pride
    No longer will I run and hide.

    I know whats right, I see a new path
    I will find happiness, at last, at last.




    Submitted on 2006-03-30 00:26:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey
    this ones goood
    not bad aty all
    fixed what I could, dealt with the rest.
    Failed so many, but passed a few tests.

    Pick up the pieces, repair them all
    Never again will I fall
    this stanza is good
    well check out my stuff
    ciao
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]


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