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    dots Submission Name: cry did idots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Fate as you call it makes you cry sometimes.

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    dotscry did idots

    Shallow are the lusts the life that is we adhere
    made in the mists of truce that is there
    reach that we will in our life that becomes
    style that we adore in the trilogy to prepare.

    Cruel to see made full of lies
    truth that we speak not known to thyself
    made to be born a curse to be spawned
    brought up in this world cruel to be felt.

    shall the decided for fate as to be called to be true
    will the future of all be a bleak set of sight
    can the magic of knowledge bring about anything
    cry did i to see that nothing was to be right.

    Submitted on 2006-03-30 02:03:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good, yet depressing poem. It's a nice write but i do believe the use of wording could have been used better so it could give it a better flow. But it was well written.
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful poem. Depressed may it be, but one cannot just push this off to the side after starting to read it until its finished. The flow and rhyming were well written, as is the entire piece. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Noreu Hotishima | [ Reply to This ]

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