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    dots Submission Name: Blessed Moments of Lifedots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 501
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 675



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       This I wrote a very long time ago. I revised the last four lines the other day. I am sure it isn't what would be considered great though. Comments wanted!


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    dotsBlessed Moments of Lifedots
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    Swing from a tree branch
    Make a mud pie
    Blow bubbles and catch them
    Chase butterflies

    Hide and go seek
    Play in the sand
    Read Mother Goose
    You're queen of the land

    Put on your make up
    Fix up your hair
    Gossip with friends
    No time to spare

    Kiss the first time
    School is over
    Move off to college
    Goodbye to your mother

    Wedding bells ring
    Work all the time
    Children at play
    Ages six and nine

    Pushing the swings
    Making mud pies
    Memories are made with
    Blessed moments of life.




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      Not too bad at all, very nice and light, and saying all the good things about growing up.

    I like the childih sing-song quality, it fits the theme very well. from a meter point of view, it could be tidied up a touch, but nothing dramatic.

    very well done, a nice change from gloom, and oh, welcome to Elite!

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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