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    dots Submission Name: Angel..dots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 757
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 936



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       My lil sista i luv ya!! :D


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    dotsAngel..dots
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    My little angel,
    that fell from the skies
    The heart of life,
    is held in her eyes,

    Her laugh
    Her smile
    Makes the whole world
    Seem so worthwhile

    To measure up to her
    no i can't compare
    for no one is like her,
    her innocence a stare

    Butterfly soul,
    fly and be free
    for you my little sister
    mean so much to me

    Your happiness means everything,
    and when you cry,
    the stars blackest tears
    fall from the sky

    A gift from god
    to the human race
    the world in aw
    of her beautiful face

    I see through her every flaw,
    and i would do anything,
    to make the sun in her world,
    shine a little bit more

    My little sister,
    My best friend,
    I will be here for you
    Right till the end...




    Submitted on 2006-03-30 04:19:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is so very impressive, especially considering that you are 14! I expected some angst, or something of the sort (sorry for the stereo type) but this is very impressive!
    It flows quite well, and is descriptive. I can tell there is alot of love put in to this, and its really personal but has that impersonal aspect in a way that everyone can compare to it, no matter what age... so impersonals not the word Im going for, but its late, and its finals time so my brain is fried. haha.
    I have a little brother for a sibling, and I certainly do not look at him in the same light that you see your sister. We definitly do not get along well when were together, but now that I'm in a different city, things are a bit different. We can tolerate each other, so to speak.
    I can tell your sister sees you as a mentor, and Im sure your doing an excellent job.
    Good work!

    -Ann
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. such deep expression of love and friendship between you and your sister... I was really touched by this. My sister and I have always been really close, but recently it seems we have been growing apart. this poem made me realize how much our relationship means to me, and I will try harder to hold on to it. Thanks for the beautiful words and inspirations! this one is definately going to be on my favorites list! keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good. Reminds me of a poem I wrote like four years ago bout my little sis. I'll post it if I can find it. Lots of love, that's a good thing! The only prob. w/ it is if you are glorifying God for giving her to you, you might wnat to capitalize His name. : D
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a vey nice poem. A little to happy for my usual taste in poetry but I admire how much you care for your sister. Yes I would do anything for my little sis as well but I don't think I could ever have that kind of attachment to her. I'm glad that you love your sister that much. It's very hard to see that anymore in families. This was a good poem of appreciation. Great job!
    - -Oli
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]


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