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Several ways I want to die


Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Several ways I want to die



I wanna die a slow death
I wanna be the person lying rotten in
the filthy basement apartment

I want the death of elvis
i want the moarn and all the tears
i wanna be killed by a psycotic fan who never knew my mind or plans

I wanna die with noise
the trembling earthquakes and the freezing winter void

I wanna die with colours
all the beauty of the world in falling waterfalls
of bloodred pearls

i wanna die with humour
with a satisfactured smile
on two pale blue lips which never even got to say the silent last goodbye




Submitted on 2006-03-30 07:55:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i felt like you hate your life so much that you see a horrible death as anything better than this.......
to prefer intense pain , wow, you must be feeling some real [censored].....
im sorry you feel this way, ive been there too myself so i relate a lot to this
do you wana be remember for just being here one minute and then wiped out in a terrible way so that you will actually be remember for that hahha, like James Dean and stuff, this is really interesting stuff and its an eye opener to read.....keep it coming,
lotsaluv
God Bless
Nadine
| Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like all the visuals! its really pretty! oh but u spelled mourn wrong! i really like this poem!
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by emb_er77 | [ Reply to This ]
  That was awsome...sounds like you wanna die a rock star...haha just kidding I like it though shows the opposite side to how "normal" people want to die.....Great Job
| Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by deathbelow | [ Reply to This ]


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