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    dots Submission Name: why i writedots

    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 2529
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotswhy i writedots

    I’m writing to free people from oppression
    Too much depression with a lack of expression
    Writing to defy those who promote suicide
    I write to stop those who choose to die
    I put my pen on the pad
    As parents give their kids things they never had
    Write for my life
    I write for salvation
    Stumble through strife
    Fight through temptation
    Writing to bring life to the people
    Why write when the whole world’s drowning in evil?
    Who else writes for a change?
    It may seem strange
    The whole world’s being devoured by pain
    So I put my life on this paper until nothing remains
    Clenching my heart and wracking my brain
    Leaving this page with the most crimson of stains
    Open wounds, just the letting the blood drain
    Pour it on paper trying to empty my veins
    Decorating pages with my sweat and my tears
    Bring my own hardships and the pain of my peers
    Leave them branded on pages
    Truly courageous words being studied by sages
    Writing is my true definition of bliss
    Put myself into this book until I no longer exist

    Submitted on 2006-03-30 07:59:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, you seem to have alot of comments about this, but still... It's so great!!! Ahhh, I was amazed! You don't write for your own problems instead for others. I think that's so great.
    Awesome :D
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
      hi i totaly agree with you on this, i dont agree with people wanting to kill themselves because of one little momment in their lives goes wrong, its not the way to look at life, u def got the rap thing goin on, it were kool, cant think of anything to make it beta.

    | Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by shae_indauk | [ Reply to This ]
      Been awhile right? lol anyways this was honest and straight to the point no bull[censored]. I like the first four lines they are a good reason to write, okay the first six..the whole things about parent's giving children what they never had is true. most parents do do that and most kid's never really appreciate it. Good write i hope to read more from you..btw how are u it's been a while lol.

    DePoetry aka Danni
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very cool. Made me think of Nahlij's "Write". I think you captured every writer's reason for writing, other than art for art's sake, which is a completely different story. Awesome job hon. A favorite for sure. Ttyl hon.
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      hey troy!!! how is troy???!! r u good!!?! today is FRIDAY! yay! this is good!! there was a really good flow 2 this!!! ok this is off da subject do u noe who Heather Headley is?? i dont!! ok this is a fav!! gosh theres to much noise in this house!! good job troy!
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      yo man whats happing,you and sins battle are money,keeping me entertained haha but anways just wanted to comment on this one cuz you spittin it for all of us who write man,nuff said ya kno keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by PROlifik | [ Reply to This ]
      dude this was [censored] perfect! this was-just- dude I can't think of what I wanna say, totally speechless this was literally perfect. I wouldn't change a thing, killer flow, awesome emotion, and awesome purpose this was a very good expression and you brought it all together more with every write.
    loved it!
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      You definetly made your point clear with this one. Writing for me serves as a way to vent and keep my mind active. The way words can effect and sometimes "change" people is so amazing to me.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      you speak the truth in this, so many kids on this site write about depression and death, to tell you the truth im sick of it, its gud to hear some proper talent and subjects to really talk and think about, and you bring it to light, thanx for sharing, its gonna be added to ma favs,
    keep em cumin babe
    x x x x
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      Not everyone writes for that reason. Some write because it's a way to get pity from others.
    I think it's great that you're not like that. I don't really write to change lifes, I just write to express my ideas, feelings, and opinions. Anyway this was a great peice. I think I'll add it to my favorites. Your writing is pheonominal, and I hope to see more of it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
    I am really impressed. This write grabs at the strings of any writer. Isn't that the reason we all write for that true expression of complete satisfaction. Incredible. Thank you for writing about your reasons for writing.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by bbcakes1115 | [ Reply to This ]
      Child. you kno how to write! this is awesome! it so truthful and wonderful. you have a great gift and the way ur put ur words together makes it flow so well. fantastic write!

    <3 kelly
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by bleedinbabygrl8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Talk about damn good! This was veru tight! I loved the flow and the rhyming used here. It just fit from start to finish. You kept up the concept and kept the reader's attention. This was very expressive as to why you write. To vent, to speak truth, to give props, and to show love. All good reasons if you ask me. Another fav for sure. Great work!

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      so very deep this is awsome.. I can so relate I don't write to be the best I write to do that best in helping others see they are not alone in this world through feelings and pain and heartache there are others out there doing there best just to survive..

    I'm always amazed at your words and how they just flow down the page and leave me hungry for more .. great write!

    * hugs *
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! once again ...You always manage to speak for me because in this poem of yours I can relate and feel the same way, Im sure every writer feels the same way. You know how to really put things like verbs in definition. I think this one was honest and heartfelt. Hope to see more man.

    Put on Favs!
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      This was excellent. Showed a lot of mentality and gave verbal/lyrical meaning to the ink. A true poet/emcee or whomever decides to pick up a pen and speak should have reasoning behind it. WIth this right you showed that even you can step out of the boundaries of hip hop and give acknowledgement to society and your salvation. Not too many can touch down with themselves and write such a deep meaningful piece. I am amazed!

    I myself have even tried to write a piece as to why I write, and it does get complicated. I look back at it and end up thinking "Nah, not quite right". You have to be in that deep zone, where you can reach the deepest intellect of yourself to fully succeed.


    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn...It's like you put all your feelings into one piece. How you feel about...everything. This is awesome and you should really keep writing. I love your other work too.
    I have never read a piece like this before. It's so emotional and deep. Keep it up! I am so putting it on my favorites list. LOL It's my favorite piece on my favorites list.

    ~*~ Lisa ~*~
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]

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