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    Author: BreakAndFall
    ASL Info:    18/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 115/153/59
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       My religion teacher said "pick your poison" the other day and i just HAD to put that in a poem... so here was the result


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    Pick your poison, choose your charm
    Hold my hand as you slowly let go
    Slip off to sleep, never to wake again
    Drift under the rocking waves, breathe no more
    Surrender to your weaknesses, battles, bloody war




    Submitted on 2006-03-30 09:22:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's a pretty awesome phrase, really, and you incorporated it well into.. a solitary verse, with accute alliteration, I liked it... Choose your charm... the last line didn't quite keep things together for me, you know? I was like, expecting more of a closure than the suggestion of weaknesses ensuing battles and bloody wars... but hey, it's all good. Peace. -rue
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]


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