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    Author: BreakAndFall
    ASL Info:    18/f/mo
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 115/153/59
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Playing with weapons
    Asking for pain
    Combining matches and gunpowder
    To think you're safe is insane




    Submitted on 2006-03-30 09:23:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a rather awesome quickie, if i do say so myself. Which i do, so it is, and yes, the matches and gunpowder can be substituted with quite a few things, fun things, like cyanide and toothpaste, sandals and a tight rope, lighters and WD40, women with guns and their period, or even, (A seizure medication a friend of mine takes..) carbomezapine and grapefruit. I enjoyed reading this piece and leaving the comment. That must mean it's inspiring. Keep up the rockin' job, eh? Peace. -rue
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry but this really made me think of Grey's Anatomy. Seen it yesterday and it's an episode where someone with a head shot is brought in who says it just happend like that when he was cleaning his weapon. He was not at all carefull.
    Back to your poem. It's short but interesting. What is this about? About a pyromane not being careful, about someone with suicidal ideas? Or is it more metaphorical, someone who is at the point of doing something stupid?
    Interesting.. tell me what it's about.

    Darth Zeus
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]


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