Description: This was a poem I wrote after writing one last letter to my love.
Last Letter -------------------------------------------
Paper feels like petals as I write
A fading flower, opened up
To send my love to you
Scent of rose reaches your fingertips
Cherish it as you cherish me
It will be my final letter
Will you write one back?
These watery eyes
Beg you. Please do.
I miss you so, it hurts to breathe
I need you here where you belong
Promise me you'll come home soon.
The thought of writing letters...brings me back to a place I don't want ever want to be again...my boyfriend got back from Iraq a while ago..and I wrote so many letters...we went through so many hard times, there were times I thought it was my last letter...and I guess I never really knew when or even if I was going to get one back. It's probably not the same situation..but for me..there was almost a desperation in every letter I wrote...I missed him so much...and I wanted a response so badly...I don't know why this was your last letter...but I hope you got your response. Great write. ~hailie~
I don't mind that you didn't give the reason (one could always imagine). I do find some of your punctuation odd though; some of your sentences get periods and some don't. I'd put a period after "you" in line three. I'd add a "The" to the beginning of line four. I'd put one after "me" and another after "letter." I'd also put them after "breathe" and "belong." These are just suggestions. This reminds me of some Asian poems I've read. Nicely done, Amy
The only confusing part of this write was why it was a last letter. Otherwise, I thought the sentiments and longing were very well expressed. It sounded as if this was a break-up, yet it was unclear what was happening to cause it.