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    dots Submission Name: MY ADDRESS:425 LIE DRIVEdots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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       If something You say is the truth=give it time

    I really don't take myself seriously
    and as my name suggest

    toyysruss


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    dotsMY ADDRESS:425 LIE DRIVEdots
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    A bed lied in everynight.
    A promise here in whisper.
    And although barely heard.
    A breaze was felt upon my neck.
    That feeling was the only truth allowed.
    That night.

    Lie down.
    And the act sends you straight.
    One on top of the other.
    As in the bed.
    Why is it never lie up?
    Because the act never sends you that way.
    Shall I try to purchase some wings.
    I'm afraid that I might be broke

    A coffin lied in everyday.
    How many have led you too?
    At least you're not here
    And I always tried too.
    Hear!
    Gentle whispers turned into someting else.
    Turned around so much
    That I became lost on
    Top of the other
    Alarm.......................................................................................................




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      Hum...definate wake up call wouldnt you say?
    Definately reminds one of dont say things you dont mean. Ya know?

    And why is sleep not something that can be done in a upright position, ya know, I agree with ya there. Guess we all must lay and lie with our lies at the end of the day I reckon. *shrugs*

    This is pretty vague, and I am only picking out the sentiments I see here. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This made no sense to me at all. lol. It was worded well, but it did not string together a collective theme or meaning. At least not to me. The flow was off some, but the imagery was nice. I'm sorry, but this was way to confusing for me to grasp.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Well makes me think of a wet dream or something... but also a nightmare at the same time. Different then a lot of the poetry i have read here. The flow was a little bumby but smoothed itself out along the way. Hope to continue to read more of your work. Have a nice day, ciao for now, Amber
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by amber_in_wyomin | [ Reply to This ]


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