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    dots Submission Name: Rabbitdots

    Author: ellesmera
    ASL Info:    18. Female. England
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 43/263/115
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
    Total Views: 1197
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       This is my friends poem. entirley her own. i had nothing to do with it and all credit must go to her. i shall pass on the commentary.
    (the auther NOT ME) my poem is based on a true story, some may or may not get this, understand if you can.
    Ellesmera: it very good and i like it.

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    Tere he was ,
    standing in a puddle of water,
    drenched to the bone,
    shivering like a rabbit,
    i carried him inside,
    i sat him down,
    but i was too late,
    he was too cold,
    no longer did he go on,
    i tried to warm him,
    but he gave up,
    i combed his hair,
    which felt like rabbits fur,
    i washed his face,
    which felt smooth,
    lke a rabbits paw,
    but he gave up;
    i placed him in the garden,
    with a blanket,
    wrapped around him,
    i said a prayer,
    and named him...Rabbit,
    after all;
    he gave me joy,
    he was the best pet,
    a girl could have,

    Submitted on 2006-03-30 11:41:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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