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    dots Submission Name: The Magic All Tripdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       If you haven't dug under the couch and in the car ashtray for $5 (US) in change to pick up fellow Elitist - Graeme - wewak's - book, "Mood Swings", a selection of musings from a fellow poet and friend I highly suggest "IT".

    This site is for critique but also for encouragement - we all share similiar dreams and expressive natures and love of creation - we are poets, we are artists & when each of supports the other in an endeavor you will find that energy "IT"self creating an environment of love & success.
    So many people here have so much talent and love and sorrow to share and most of us are here because the world doesn't yet appreciate our musings and truths and sorrows - so we have each other & together we flood the world.
    So, that said,

    This piece is a piece inspired by Graeme's, "The Magic Tricyle" - a bit of epiph the tif - old school Epiph in Wonderland style

    Enjoy the Daze & Love Life poets of ES!

    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share

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    dotsThe Magic All Tripdots

    My car broke down,
    <@> found the magic trike!
    We started towards our river
    on a Mother Nature hike...

    Prince (trike) gulps,
    "I'm thirsty!"
    I say, "Honey, whatcha like?"

    "A liter of Ale
    4 this little
    By God, He drank so much
    <@> soon had a bike!

    Along the Alice in Wonderland trail
    we encountered Ranger Mike -
    1/2 native he greeted us alarmingly
    with "CRIKE!"
    he he he...we knew he was kool
    when he laughed loudly, "PSYCHE!"

    Yellow-bellied like a lizard
    all we replied was, "GEIC" - OH!
    How you scared us!
    But sense of humor's #1....

    Bike & <@> 2 tHE river
    4 sum wave rockin fun~*~
    No particular hurry ~ ~
    we meander & rarely run...

    For us no thing truly begins
    so 0 things 'ere' done; <-->
    1 = sumthing as something = none...
    everythings so & on again
    different yet the same,

    Take zero credit, deal 0 blame,
    does "IT" really matter;
    a dream or a game?

    I may be a country girl
    but I'm classy all the same
    I answer to Lady
    'cause' i ain't no dame

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      "Take zero credit, deal 0 blame"

    I love this line. I like the way you've played with words and signs here. Also the infectious rhyming pattern is nice.

    I recently started posting again on this site. Just posted a poem called "The way I'm wired". Please leave some feedback if you have the time...
    | Posted on 2011-07-02 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I think someone spent some time with chesire cat before writing this. It was lets see; unique, yeah, sure that worx. it was an interestingly fun read.
    | Posted on 2006-04-13 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Got quite a kick out of this poem. I had a good hearty belly laugh
    My fav;
    I may be a country girl
    but I'm classy all the same
    I answer to lady
    cause I ain't no dame

    Luved it!!!
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me smile even though I had no clue what you were talking about. lol. I always like you wit and lively way to jazz up a poem structure. I loved the last stanza the most, maybe because I live like that. Tiff this was a funny write. It made me laugh and smile. Now please tell me what you meant with this. lol.

    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good indeed. It bounced along and flowed really well together. Much inspired and very inspiring to others as well.

    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      thats crazy, that the weirdest style of writing i have ever seen...but it is great....i had to read it a couple of times, but it was a very good write, i like the way it came out...
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by withblindedeyez | [ Reply to This ]
    This write had me really confused at the style but after reading this again I gotta tell ya I was amazed at hoew perfectly this write came out
    This is truly origanel and like I said
    Great Job
    And Yes I can see a little of the greatness of Graeme in this write
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      fun and head spinning all in one.
    I like this very much very much.
    But the funny thing is
    this is the second peice inspired by Graeme that I have read in the last few moments.

    But thats cool
    Nice job with this.

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Coma-Black | [ Reply to This ]
      hahahaha! Vintage Tiffosaurus indeed!

    There are three takes I got here, Princess:

    The innocent one, with your tale of a forest walk with magical happenings as nature shows you it's wizardry.

    The spiritual one, with the "IT" and "HE" connotations, serving to cive it a spritual subliminal meaning.

    The sexual one. This could be a tripped out ses romp, you know? Read every line between the lines from a sexual point of view, whew!!! You ain't no dame!!!


    wonderful stuff, I'm always happy to inspire others!

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      An enligtening tale you spun with your happy words, for example "Bike & <@> 2 tHE river
    4 sum wave rockin fun~*~
    No particular hurry ~ ~
    we meander & rarely run...would be fun. `always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! this one had me smiling. But then, your writes usually do
    I do recall Graeme's "tricycle" poem. It was delightful. I too, have his book and enjoy re-reading his poems .. a different one each day.
    The man has talent. No doubt about that.
    Now, back to "your" poem...
    I like how it starts out that you grab "his" trike and go out on your own adventure..
    and I love the humor..
    and the last part.

    "I may be a country girl
    but I'm classy all the same
    I answer to Lady
    'cause' i ain't no dame "

    Neat, and fun to read
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me think of an "on the road tale" a la the golden beatnik age. I liked it & how you incorporated your companions. Lots of fun word games I will need to read it again. I like poems with layers, definitely, & ones you can play word games with as you read....Thank you ! (for sharing)
    | Posted on 2006-04-15 00:00:00 | by CleoCollier | [ Reply to This ]

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