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    dots Submission Name: Not worthy of your lovedots

    Author: bbcakes1115
    ASL Info:    22/f/ut
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35/27/16
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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       I wrote this from my friends point of view when her fiance left her. And I had seen him try to change her and make her something she was not. I killed me to see him do this to her and I wrote this for her when she told me he had left.

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    dotsNot worthy of your lovedots

    Who is she?
    Who is it you want me to be?

    What made your love disappear?
    What did I do to whither your heart?

    How could I not see your love erase me?
    How could you kill the sould you once loved?

    Why do you hate me?
    Why would you change me?

    Am I not worthy of you love?
    Am I not making you happy?

    Is this why you treat me with discust?
    Is this why your leaving?

    Tell me! I need the truth!

    Submitted on 2006-03-30 12:33:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure that I would really call this poetry, but this would be a wonderful place to start one heck of a poem. If I were you, I would explore each one of these questions that you asked in here and answer them in a poetic way. As it stands, these are just questions. It's a very sad topic, but you could write this from both points of view. One in regular text and the other in italics and as I said, just explore and put these questions into a poem. Not saying that you would have to use both points of view either, but I think it would be an interesting way of seeing this relationship unfold and ultimately come to a close.

    That said, it's horrible when somebody loves someone else for what they want them to be, rather than for what they are. I'm glad that she's out of a situation like this. There isn't anyone out there that should be treated like that and I hope that she realizes now that she deserves better than that.

    Let me know if you do happen to do something different with this though, I think you could have something really great here if you show us the dynamics of what you're questioning.

    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      damn, its a sad topic. I've seen it with my own eyes, and as i read this piece i saw a similiar image. As a friend maybe help her realize she is probably worth more what she is recieving in a marriage like that. Then again i know nothing more then this piece.
    Good expressions & read.

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]

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