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    dots Submission Name: School Bus Driversdots

    Author: bbcakes1115
    ASL Info:    22/f/ut
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35/27/16
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 743
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       my mom is a school bus driver and she drives the special needs kids. She asked me to write something for her. It might be a little lame but this is the best I could do at the time. Got any ideas let me know

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    dotsSchool Bus Driversdots

    Yellow safety trans load
    Travels down a wineding road
    beep, beep, here we go!

    Hello! We say to boarders
    How are you doing today?
    They may not speak
    Sometimes it makes you weak

    What a great job going places
    to take care of smiling faces
    They're wonderful graces
    Bus Drivers sure are fortunate
    to have a job so rewarding

    Children all aboarding

    Submitted on 2006-03-30 13:19:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well you have here a lot of potential i would have arrenged and added some other details to engage readers.. well but idid i think it was an okay writing expressing some feelings that not many people get about bus drivers ... well keep writing and have a nice day
    and hope you can come by and check out my latest writing and leaving a comment please
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    have a nice day
    and peace and love
    take care
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      this one was kinda shallow. it breached the surface but i think u couldv'e went deeper with this one. i'll admit that it is a fitting tribute to the bus driver u know. u classified this as a poem about society so i was expecting something different. like u comparing certain people in society to bus drivers
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]

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