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    dots Submission Name: Visit To Nana'sdots

    Author: AlabamaFarmGirl
    ASL Info:    50/F/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 518/333/26
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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       My grands have been spending spring break with me. So I made up this poem about some of our days together...

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    dotsVisit To Nana'sdots

    Happy is a house in disarray
    as it must look on this day
    Signs of children's little patter
    this mess doesn't really matter
    Tripped on a few cars here
    fell across a doll over there
    Nintendo games played so long
    two bursts into a joyful song
    from this girl and the boys
    In the kitchen cooking up cakes
    proud of the things they make
    sticky fingerprints everywhere
    laughing aloud without a care
    Kisses gently upon my cheek
    from grands that are so meek
    Flowers they pick and bring
    To Nana means everything
    Have you ever experienced this?
    Wondered what you have missed?
    Nana here feels so richly blessed
    Even though I need a REST!!!

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      Cute Write, Linda! Written so well......it brought to mind a lively, cheerful scene of all the cousins gathered at their grandma's house enjoying the holidays.......a unique poem with good rhyme scheme and a good idea too. I enjoyed reading this. Nice write! Keep it up! : ) ; ) : )
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! This is good, Linda! The joys of being a Grandparent! They're precious when they're little, even though they "wear you out"! Nice poem!
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I remember Nanna, so I picked this one.

    Very nicely done. The content and the rhyme. If you need a REST, you should go get your own Nintendo, thats how the kids take a break these days.

    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
      My this brings the tears of joyous memories.
    Mine were all home for the Passion Week, they all returned home for Easter at home.
    A great setting for love and release while our little ones unwind and enjoy a visit with long missed loved ones.
    Don't we wish ALL kids were this lucky?
    Nice reading you my dear,
    | Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      this is...kinda weird actually,it embodys almost the exact same thing that one of my poems does,its 'you cant know till you read it' on the sight,but thats not what it is really called,you can find out by reading it,though,and it is actually from another point of view.anyway,i liked the humor that you put on the end and i think that you discribed how it feels to just see and feel the joy and love that is shown in relashonships(sorry,i cant spell worth a flip) like grandma-to-grandchild,and in some cases,in mom-to-son/daughter and dad-to-son/daughter.a great write as usual,hope to see some new ones soon.

    Keep it real,
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      I really needed to read this right now - my grandmother just went in a home and is very angry & gettting dementia and she's been leaving messages that she wants me to rot in hell & I'm trying not to take it personally - that her mind is going......I sat last night looking at some of her stuff & jewelry & remembered the days long ago when my grandmother was my everything & all the adventures I had with her - this is a very nice dedication to those moments that children cherish forever and I'm going to try to put together a positive piece about those times.
    Thanks for sharing & for being a great Nana!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    | Posted on 2006-04-05 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, Grands this was a great tribute to the grandkids. It has a touch of everything. Love, happiness, comedy, amazement and of course motherly warmth. The long needed rest was well deserved. The best thing about grandkids is that you can spoil them and send them home to their parents and you don't even have to feel guilty for it HA HA HA

    Nicely done Linda

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde (Thats four times today) HEE HEE HEE
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really cute poem. While I was reading it, I could actually see the little kids running around, getting into everything. But then I could also see you (the grandmother) smiling at them even though they made huge messes. On a negative note, the rhyming was a little forced but I still enjoyed reading it. I love your poems about the country life and all that. You're a great writer. Please keep submitting your stuff!!

    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by PolaroidMemory | [ Reply to This ]
      You adore your little grandkids Linda
    That is plain to see
    I bet they bring you joy beyond compare
    Special time you spend with them
    No money could ever buy
    With a love that is so special and so rare

    I don't have any grandchildren yet. All this joy and happiness awaits me.

    Your write was very loving, and perfectly expressed - a joy to read.

    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an enjoyeable read, but I did find it a bit distracting to see every word capitalized and to see punctuation like "Noise,,,,,Noise,,,,,Noise,,,,,,,,,,". Wouldn't "Noise, noise, noise" work just as well. I think the rhyme worked well with the light mood, but I would try to capitialise like you would prose or disregard it altogether. This is a fun read, Amy
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Whew! I feel tired after reading that.(lol)
    Most enjoyable! Now as I look back to those good old days at Grandma's house,well, I don't know how she could tolerate my antics. But, if she had been rough on me perhaps I would not have liked to visit. It is a dreadful time when it comes time to pickup,put-up and cleanup,but granny never did tell me that. Perhaps she was letting me have a vacation from those commands at home. Bet if I had stayed at granny's house she would have become mom. Now that I look back I would not have blamed her for acting momish.
    Your writings are so full of remembrances they seem to be universal in nature.
    This would be a nice submission to the magazine,"Woman's Day" or "Family Circle". they both publish original poems. TRY IT!!!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful simply beautiful
    I think I told you before my sisters children call my mom their grandma Nana Too
    I really liked the message to this and this write carries a lot of emotion
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I never get to see my grands 'cause we live so far apart. That means I don't get to see my kids very often either 'cause they live with the Grandkids ya know. Good job writing this happy little poem Linda and I like the twist at the end! Yep just Doris Jean, Crackerjack and me here! We do get pictures sometimes though.
    Nice cheery and happy poem...
    And I walked all the way over here just to read it!

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      This was neat. I like the way you spoke of the ups and dwons to the kids visit, yet showed no regrets. It was written almost like a little song or nursery rhyme. I liked your flow and the simple joy this extuded. Very nice work.

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      A day in the life of a grandmother with the grandkids making a mess everywhere...that's what grandmothers live for!!! The best thing about them is that you can give them back to their own mother after you have had enough. Don't get me wrong...I really do miss my grandkids, but I remember the days you described here. I loved the time with them, but I always hated cleaning everything and putting things back in their place after the kids were gone.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      HA! Sounds like quite a handful there!
    Reminds me of my nieces and nephews and their visits. Your rhyme was great and the story was one of those that puts smiles on peoples faces, HA! I am smiling now!
    Have fun!
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      If I hurry I can be the first to post
    Wow, sounds like a lively house you're having today. And doesn't it seem a lot easier to smile when they do something cute and out of the way? Yes, I do in fact wonder what I'm missing. But one day.. I'll have my own "grands".

    On the 18th line.. maybe just a comma after Nana instead of an "s"? [To Nana, Means Everything]

    Overall, I enjoyed this view into your day.
    Had me smiling.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a sweet little poem that put a smile on my face. Not enough of these are written; everything is so dark and desolute. It made me think of my grandmama. The rhyming and the flow fit it so perfectly. Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-04-21 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]

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