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    dots Submission Name: Protective Point of Viewdots
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    Author: Kersofmia
    ASL Info:    19/m/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    5.51 - 111/84/44
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 290
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1056



    Description:
       MmR and I kind of worked on this piece together and as in together I mean I wrote a piece and she rewrote or in her words put some lipstick on it lol... So enjoy the life of a ??? Try and figure it out lol...


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    dotsProtective Point of Viewdots
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    A tearing cuts the silence
    Hear me sigh
    ~my first breath~


    Use me
    Abuse me
    Ride me into death

    Blinded with no understanding,
    And being abrubtly strecthed..
    Strained beyond my own confidence.

    Wrapped around something awkward,
    hearing confessions of sweet nothings
    then rubbed against a stranger.

    A soft stranger seeming so familar
    taunts me into stiff position.
    And as I ponder..

    ~whats next to occur~
    I am forced in a narrow pool

    But I smell a scent so sweet to me
    While on the edge of drowning..
    weakened by steady helplessness,
    the thrust becomes pounding.

    My travel has brought me
    close to death..
    my insides tight and throbbing.

    I must have took my final breath
    Because my interior filled with something
    Ripped away from the only home I've known
    And peeled off broken structure..




    Submitted on 2006-03-30 17:00:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      aww Kermie, i'm flattered that you used my suggestions....

    you should change your description tho, because i didn't rewrite it..you're giving me too much credit...i only tweeked it a little for you

    anyway, i love that you actually wrote about this lol...i didn't really think you would...but i'm glad you did..

    i'm going to have to fav this, and not because of my hand in it, just to let you know
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]



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