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    dots Submission Name: Kissdots
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    Author: Autum-Moon
    ASL Info:    15/Female/drowing
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 284/165/29
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 955
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 555



    Description:
       This is all about my boyfriend Andy and how I feel about him and how he treats me. feel free to say what you wish.


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    dotsKissdots
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    You hold me softly,
    And put your hands through my hair,
    I feel so special,
    And I know you really care.

    You lean over slowley and,
    And tell me to close my eyes,
    You cup my face in your hands,
    And tell me no lies.

    You tell me you love me,
    And promise to never leave.
    Tears stream down my face,
    And in you I believe.

    Your lips touch mine,
    And deep inside I know this,
    Behind your lips lays your love,
    Sealed with a kiss.




    Submitted on 2006-03-30 18:21:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have my own opinions about love, I just hope you don't get hurt in the end, nayways nice write, brings back memories and it's nice to see every now and than especially living in a world filled with writes like mine, nicely done short, and very sweet, bye now
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      oooohhhhh!! How sweet is this?? Oh, man you sound sooo happy. I am so glad that you have found someone that makes you feel so good. WOW I am just soo speechless!! Well about the poem!!! My favorite part was the last stanza. It was perfectly worded and it had a sense of longing that I could totally relate with. It was beautiful!!! GREAT WRITE!!
    ~Alyssa~
    | Posted on 2006-04-02 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
      the flow was a bit off in the beginning, but eventually it became perfect, or as close as anyone can get to it. I loved the lines
    You tell me you love me,
    And promise to never leave.
    Tears stream down my face,
    And in you I believe.
    Lovely. The rythem (sp?) was exceptional. I look forward to reading more!

    Celine

    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by LivingShadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i think you're inlove..hehe none of my business though, but this shows what you feel and i think that's cool.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]
      You tell me you love me,
    And promise to never leave.
    Tears stream down my face,
    And in you I believe.

    ^ i love thatt hunn i love your stuff. its amazing how much i relate. and keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]


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