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    dots Submission Name: Prisonerdots
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    Author: nosferotu_gurl
    ASL Info:    24/female/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 140/165/67
    Words: 443
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 927
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3007



    Description:
       I warn you now that its REALLY long so read at your own risk and comment if you make it.My heart on a sleeve but criticizm is welcome with compliments.Later(I edited it on 4-8-06 so sorry if its not to your liking still but I have to get things off my mind)


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    dotsPrisonerdots
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    Born into a cage
    Locked up in a box
    Freedom is a dream
    So many "saftey"laws
    They tell us to be real
    Reach for the top
    Yet torment is the price
    Even for our minds we're locked
    Waiting all our life
    For one love true
    Always wondering
    Could it be you
    Though lost in our souls
    Hiding from the pain
    An angel unexpected
    To break down all we made
    Wall of lies to cover
    What reality condemns
    Putting on a mask
    To hide the hurt from them
    We dont want attention
    Yet craving comfort so
    Just one person like us
    To erase the word "alone"
    Rumors pass
    All lies to spite
    They dont see the effect
    Deaf and lost to sight
    Tears seem never ending
    Could we drown in them
    Frustation of confusion
    What to do and when
    Many paths to choose
    Two usually the hardest
    Unless you check the stats
    And choose the faithful,honest
    Why hesitate
    When once so sure
    Knowing past
    Can still endure
    Can you relate
    Or just love the sound
    To this tune
    Maybe your bound
    For me its fate
    To stand for one
    Through pain and tears
    Love cant be undone
    Take the memories
    That torment me
    Box them up
    Give to the sea
    Of past and turn
    From the flames
    Of the bridge
    Whos to blame
    As sparks die out
    And chains snap back
    The bridge wont burn
    Strength I lack
    To hope I'm prisoner
    As am to life
    Please come back
    Or God end this life
    Many nights
    Ive thought it through
    My sad end
    But then of you
    Had the razor
    Sliced so deep
    Yet held back
    From destinations keep
    Why I ask
    Am I still here
    Why cant I leave
    Or you I fear
    Dont let go
    Cant let you slip
    Fell off the cliff
    Helplessly hit
    The ground on spikes
    Impaled deep
    Dear Lord I pray
    This soul do keep
    Drain the nightmares
    Destroy the bomb
    Of hate and pain
    Before "so long"
    In my eyes
    What can you see
    What lies I show
    Hide reality
    Find a memory
    Play it back
    Minds eye to see past
    They do lack
    Alone I stand
    Ghost in a shell
    Cant save me
    For this is hell
    Society the slave driver
    I wont bow down
    Only for one
    Do I remain a prisoner now
    Pain and pleasure
    That was ours
    How could you
    Show her the door
    I hate but love
    Smile but puke
    Is this a game
    If so rebuke
    I wait through sickness
    And pain I'm dealt
    What is this torment
    Is there help
    Im just a prisoner




    Submitted on 2006-03-31 02:51:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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