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    dots Submission Name: get to know medots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 784
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    dotsget to know medots
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    will you ever get to know me?
    i mean get on the inside,
    im not all street dancer,
    you only praise me for ma hip hop glide.
    i do have other interests,
    im not all arse n' tits,
    i love to take long walks,
    and music is how i get my kicks.
    i love all the things that you do,
    i dont just pick one thing,
    your special to me and i love to keep you close
    i dont see you as a one night fling.
    i know im not a bad person,
    though i know i have made some mistakes,
    but please trust me when i say,
    that a conversation could be all that it takes.




    Submitted on 2006-03-31 06:01:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think u just took me into the mind of a stripper. hmm. interesting.....i liked this one. sometimes men see women as just a sexual outlet and not as the intelligent creatures that u are. good job babe
    | Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely piece, I truly like it. The way it is written and how it starts to flow around through it. I can feel the beat of what the music might be, if it was there. If you turn this into a song with music (if you haven't already) I'm sure it'll be a hit. Keep it up my friend.
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Noreu Hotishima | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this piece, its too common to be stereotyped all of the time, i think that the rhyme was a little out of rhythm in a couple of places but once stanza was re-read it was fine,
    Keep up the writes
    John
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    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      This was kinda short but you had a very good point, when you look at one part of someone's life not only do you not learn much about them but you could really hurt them. and there's much more to every single person than one choice, one moment or one night, a moment can't capture the emotions of a lifetime.
    good write,
    jess
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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