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    dots Submission Name: I stand alonedots
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    Author: ellesmera
    ASL Info:    18. Female. England
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 43/263/115
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 934
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 828



    Description:
       i did this after i found out some very nasty rumers spreading around my school about me. even y 'friends' were spreading them so in this case, i really do stand alone

    it is lyrcs/poetry.


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    dotsI stand alonedots
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    Soul of stone,
    So is my heart,
    Eyes of glass,
    Will of steel;
    All can be broken,
    All can fall apart.

    I stand alone,
    In the dark,
    Bodyís broken,
    Shattered, my heart;
    I am breaking,
    It shows.

    I drain away,
    Hiding in a corner,
    Thatís not affected by disease,
    A corner of my mind,
    Itís all that keeps me free,
    From madness.

    I stand alone,
    In the dark,
    Minds broken,
    Shattered, to the stars;
    I am bleeding,
    Everyone knows.

    My soul of stone,
    My pitch black heart,
    My eyes of glass,
    Hold my will of steel;
    But its broken;
    Shattered,
    On the stone.

    I stand alone.




    Submitted on 2006-03-31 06:16:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well well well, what can i say it has been a while since we have communicated. and the first random post of yours that i find is truly wonderful, i hope you have sheet music for this as i would very much like to hear how it should sound. I hope you keep in touch.

    forever your Friend

    Dx
    | Posted on 2014-09-27 00:00:00 | by draconus | [ Reply to This ]
      This is actually pretty neat and nifty...the short lines work superbly, excellent! Everying is stated briefly and succinctly--this often does not work in poetry, however here it DOES...suprisingly good as it is a topic that is done to death...bravo...bravo...bravo!
    | Posted on 2006-11-21 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, its Selina from the vampire rp ^.^ I realy like this poem... I have one kinda like it, its called "Me, Myself, and I" My poem kinda talks about a mask I wear though.... Well, I've learned to live without it. ^.^ good luck and hope to read more!!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Sasafraz | [ Reply to This ]
      very good well done
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by draconus | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmm, 14 year old girl locked up! Haha, just kidding, and don't worry I'm not divorced and 40 haha. Anyways, um it's good, I like the ending a lot, isn't as good as Godsmack's song 'I Stand Alone' haha but, it's good.
    | Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by M. Crazy Eight | [ Reply to This ]
      It's nice. Emotions are very well expressed. I like the way it started..The last ones were a bit misarranged I think..I can relate to it somehow, it hurts to stand alone, but at times..it can be challenging,you become strong..I agree it's very original.
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummm...the repeating of the words at the end I really didnt like(but putting them in different order was better than just plain repeating them). It made me feel...well I feel that way already so it made me feel happy someone else understands. Its reminds me of my life. It feels very original.
    | Posted on 2006-04-07 00:00:00 | by Sarah J | [ Reply to This ]


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