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    dots Submission Name: Regretdots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 714
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    Cry, Cry, Cry….

    Slowly fading from the inside out….
    Words can’t express the meaning, the feeling,
    Of regret, waiting for the tightness in my chest
    To subside, waiting, running from these tears….

    Run, Run, Run….

    Manifest these fears, lick these wounds let them heal,
    I know I’ve done wrong, is there no way back into
    Your soft bleeding crimson heart, rusty and scratched
    With its door locked, confine wrapped in chains….

    Knock, Knock, Knock….

    I’m here; want you let me in….
    You can shut me out of you hearts chambers, but I
    Will stand in front of your doors, for eternity,
    Waiting, bleeding for my chance to say I’m sorry….

    Carve, Carve, Carve….

    I’ll carve these words into stone, just to show
    You how three words can not describe, the way
    The fire burns me alive inside, melting everything
    I once deny, replacing with loveless lies….

    Cut, Cut, Cut….

    These fears, flow from a vein….
    To overfill and spill the cup of life, pouring my life
    All over the floor, for you to see, that I’m nothing
    Without you beside me....

    Regret, Regret, Regret....

    I regret everything I've done to you,
    The lies, the storys, "Im sorry....
    I'm not worth the sight of your eye's,
    But I, will love you till I die....

    I regret....




    Submitted on 2006-03-31 10:59:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a very powerful piece and instantly seemed very lyrical to me. I liked the repetition of the key words and your regret is heartfelt but you must allow yourself forgiveness of self and march onward from there - sorrow and pain often accompany love and peace and were it not for one we wouldn't know the other - maintain a healthy balance and you'll rock on!
    Nicely done!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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