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    dots Submission Name: As Frail as a Piscesdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       In astrology, those born under the sign of Pisces are known for having intense psychic pain. Kurt Cobain was a Pisces, for example.


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    You come to me as frail as a Pisces,
    and my tiny body bolsters yours
    because your needing me
    makes me feel useful,
    for I need you
    like plants call for sunlight,
    and your tears replenish me
    like rain in the desert.






    Submitted on 2004-05-05 19:15:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is like a brief glimpse into co-dependency.. Needing to be needed.

    I have heard that about Pisces. But I also think that all the planets have their say...not just the sun..lol.
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      i liek this , i lvoe how you read into things to make poetry about them, thiswas great the analogies you used were excellent, great write i especially liekd the lines:
    And my tiny body bolsters yours
    Because your needing me
    Makes me feel useful

    i thought thatwas beautiful
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      um. what happened? This seems to be a stumbler... one of those writes that came together as you dropped Alpha-Bits onto sticky paper and submitted a picture of it... we all flop though... keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      Um.......This is an ok poem. I think that you can make this poem a little more explainable. Kurt Cobain is God.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by pyroskull | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems like the whole poem hinged on the one line "as frail as a pisces". I think it could use some elaboration and it could be a really good start if you keep with the same idea. Other than that, it's a good write.
    | Posted on 2004-05-05 00:00:00 | by ACircuitShock | [ Reply to This ]


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